Saturday, 2 May 2015

In writing WALHT show not tell


Tell
Show
I was happy.
I skipped all the way home, humming cheerful songs as if my heart would burst with joy.
The classroom was a mess.
Books, papers, and tools were strewn everywhere across the classroom, making the place look like a rubbish dump.
We lost the game. I was sad.
After the game, I walked slowly along, head down, my hands in my pocket, dragging my feet along the ground. Nobody likes losing.
I was sad
My heart felt heavy, I tried not to cry.
I was really excited and nervous.
I kept going to the window every five seconds to check and see if my mum was home yet. I thought every little sound in the hallway might be her. I was so jumpy that when the phone rang, I nearly fell off my chair. My feet kept tapping and sweat poured from my eyebrow.
She was angry
She kicked the door as she stomped out of the room.
I was really scared.
I thought every sound was coming closer and closer. I was so jumpy that when the phone rang, I nearly fell off my chair.







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